Thursday, September 29, 2011

A True Poem

A True Poem (it is a lie poem)

We jump on our heads
we eat upside down
we eat banana skins
as we wear a crown.

We live out in space
our faces are square
which means we can't race
and that we can't bear.

By Zeb

11 comments:

  1. Wow you have a amazing poem.
    Can you teach me please.
    I need help some time.

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  2. Hi Zeb
    We really liked your poem. We liked the rhyming words that you used.
    We are writing poems this Term as well. Could you tell us the features of a true poem so we could try one.

    Room 12

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  3. Hi Zeb you wrote a funny and great poem. I know that this poem isn't true but it is great! Can you write a poem that is true?

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  4. Awesome poem Zeb I really like the ryhming words that you used.:)

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  5. Nice Job Zeb!
    I really liked how you wrote that it was a fake poem because with the title. You should keep up on the rhyming it was so great I wanted to keep on reading and reading I actually read it five times. It was so great I can't think of any feed back to give you.


    From Michelle at stonefields school

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  6. Wow! Zeb that poem is really good and funny!. It's pretty weird when we eat up side down and we eat banana skins. It is a really good poem too.

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  7. Wow! Zeb that poem is really good and funny!. It's pretty weird when we eat up side down and we eat banana skins. It is a really good poem too.

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  8. Wow! Zeb that poem is really good and funny!. It's pretty weird when we eat up side down and we eat banana skins. It is a really good poem too.

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  9. Hi! Zeb. You really had a funny poem! But the best thing of all was that you put in the poem about body parts as well so that the poem would tell other people that you can't do the bad things like what you said in the poem.


    Well Done!!!

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  10. Zeb , I really like your poem , it's okay if it a short poem , and I would like to read your any time.

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  11. I love your poem Zeb great imagination.

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